People think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others believe that there are other alternative solutions for reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion on this topic.

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recent years. Reducing
crime
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argumentation topic in many
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, some people suggest
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prison longer time while others think there are variant several
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of handling to reduce
crime
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way
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crime
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actively
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crimping
crime
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generation to think
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time
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before making the worse thing and putting a foot forward through illegal work. Certainly, it can cost
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a lot of money to have a steady place of holding the criminal persons for
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term and
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, reducing
crime
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depend
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on bad
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force someone before thinking
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bad manner.
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to handle with trouble
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of taking any wrong decision. In
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problems if they can simply find
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to award them
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furture
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further
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countries punish with paying a high number of money including
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and bills. In conclusion,
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jail period would be a good option for some hard cases those who
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difficulties matter. But can not be always a better method to stop crimes.
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • habitual offenders
  • retribution
  • rehabilitation
  • overcrowding
  • recidivism
  • community service
  • restorative justice
  • crime prevention programs
  • youth mentorship
  • neighborhood watch
  • justice system
  • re-offending
  • financial strain
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