A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the company. In your letter, • describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team • summarize the benefits of paying for the concerts • say how you think the company should spend the money

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing in regards to a request for feedback from my side as an audience, between the activities choices provided by your
company
for our local residents and by elaborating a few benefits for each option. The idea to sponsor the local sports team for children will not only be a healthy interest for the children
,
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but
this
would
also
be appreciated by parents who have not been able to afford their child's sports.
This
will
also
allow our potential youth to limit their screen time in
this
technological world and help them to develop a habit of physical activity. The concert is an enjoyable activity too, where people will be entertained well. Every local resident will surely remember
this
event for a very long time and especially if it is happening two times. In my opinion, the
company
must sponsor the sports team for local children, as it has long-term benefits along with supporting overall families directly and indirectly. The
company
will
also
be able to advertise for two years throughout
this
unique initiative, whereas concerts are just two days events. I will appreciate it if you will take my feedback into consideration and will surely respect any decision of the
company
. Yours faithfully, Nofal Amin
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