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Some people believe that volunteer work should be a requirement for teenagers in high schools (for instance working for a charity). To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Volunteering is one of the ways to help other people or the environment, and the idea of adding it to high-school students as a requirement has some supporters. In
this
 essay, I will write my own point of view.
First
 and foremost, volunteering gives an incredible addition to a high-school student in
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 application process to a college and drastically augments his or her chances of being accepted to a wished educational institution.
Moreover
, volunteering is about helping the surrounding world, and appending it as a constant discipline will definitely bear a new peaceful generation of teenagers. On the opposite side, volunteering is being made by people who wish to do it from the depth of their hearts, and if it was a requirement, there always would be youngsters who would not be interested in volunteering, and in
such
 situations, it will be an issue rather than a blessed opportunity to make their own contribution to the world. In conclusion, volunteering is definitely a positive event where high-school students are able to assist a local organization or charity company.
However
, if it had been a mandatory requirement, the definition of it would be disappeared.
Consequently
, frankly speaking, it should not be compulsory for all youngsters.
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