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It is often said that governments spend too much money on projects to protect wildlife While there other problems that are more important. Do you agree or disagree?

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Over the past twenty years or so, many
governments
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 in developed and developing countries have spent more budgets on protecting
wildlife
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 than dealing with other problems
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 environments or public transportation systems. Some ecologists believe that
authorities
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 should protect
wildlife
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resources
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 by spending more
funds
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 on these
projects
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, while some
citizens
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 and
nationals
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 think that their officials should focus more on other national issues
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education
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 and public transportation.
This
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 essay will discuss both perspectives and provide my opinion on why I agree that
authorities
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 should spend more
funds
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 on
wildlife
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 programs. On the one hand, it can be claimed that
governments
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 or
authorities
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 should focus more on protecting their countries'
wildlife
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resources
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.
That is
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, these
resources
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 have unique characteristics that need to be managed. To be more specific,
wildlife
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resources
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 or
projects
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 in different developed and developing nations are so special and rare they are valuable for their
citizens
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 to visit and learn about if
governments
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 or
authorities
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 do not manage or protect these
wildlife
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resources
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, their
citizens
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 and
nationals
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 may lose many opportunities to acquire different knowledge about
wildlife
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 species or biodiversity concepts in real environments.
On the other hand
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, it can be suggested that some
nationals
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 and residents expect their
authorities
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 to spend more public
funds
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 on public systems
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 as
education
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, transportation, or entertainment places like museums or art galleries.
That is
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 to say, these public
resources
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 are more significant than
wildlife
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resources
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 or
projects
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 because they can provide their
citizens
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 with more
resources
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 to enjoy the social welfare systems and benefits.
However
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, these people forget that
wildlife
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resources
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 or
projects
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 are still critical for their countries to manage or protect as they are owned by the public and
governments
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, not private assets which can use randomly.
Furthermore
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,
wildlife
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resources
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 or
projects
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 have educational purposes and entertainment functions for their
nationals
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 to learn or enjoy by costing some fares or fees. In conclusion, it can be asserted that
governments
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 or
authorities
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 should protect and spend more
funds
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 on
wildlife
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projects
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 because of their rarity and
education
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 purposes which can teach and benefit more
citizens
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 in their nations.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • ecological balance
  • safeguard
  • natural habitats
  • foster
  • cultural of conservation
  • long-term ecological sustainability
  • economic benefits
  • significant source of revenue
  • investment
  • nation’s economic wealth
  • preservation of ecosystems
  • clean water and air
  • prioritization
  • multi-faceted government budgets
  • environmental protection
  • wildlife conservation
  • neglecting
  • detrimental effects
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