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Traditional foods and traditional methods of food preparation. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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More and more
convenience
foods
 appear in the market nowadays. Some
people
 believe that one day,
convenience
 food will replace traditional
foods
 and traditional food preparation methods. It sounds reasonable, but I don't think so. In my view, the reason leading to
this
 phenomenon is that
people
 are getting busier and busier nowadays. Inevitably
convenience
foods
 sprang up in response to
people
's needs. It seems
convenience
foods
 do replace the status of traditional food in the market with reason, while it does not reveal the essence of
this
 phenomenon.
First
,
people
 get busier because of the development of the economy. Peoples have to sacrifice their fragments of time to work to get more money to satisfy their growing will. Many of them even have not time to eat their breakfast and lunch.
However
,
this
 phenomenon came out mainly because
people
 want to improve their life. They see it as a necessary sacrifice for their wish. It's impossible that
people
 constantly work without enjoyment. When peoples realize their wishes, they will long for a higher level of enjoyment that certainly contains eating. At that time, they will pay more attention to health-conscious and what they eat. Unhealthy
foods
, specifically
convenience
foods
, will not be considered by those who requited higher quality of life.
People
 will favour traditional
foods
 which are healthier than the former.At
this
 point, with need traditional
foods
.
Convenience
foods
 can't take the place of traditional
foods
. Overall, the emergence of
convenience
foods
 is a response to
people
's needs, and traditional
foods
 will not disappear is so. The former is the result of the pursuit of the latter. Wherefore I don't think
convenience
foods
 will replace the traditional ones.
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