You had some photos of your family taken by a professional photographer. Write a letter to the photographer. In your letter: Say that you liked their photos of your family Ask them to be your photographer at a special family event Give them the details of the event.
Dear Mr. Sharma,
I am writing
this
letter to show my interest in hiring you for my sister's wedding.
I want to thank you for clicking the amazing pictures on my parents' marriage anniversary last
month. Not to mention
, the quality of these photos is commendable and the way you organised the photographs is also
unique; thereby, looking forward to hiring you again.
Indeed, my family and I are planning for the marriage of my elder sister which will take place next month. Therefore
, I request you to do the photography as well as
the videography if possible.
Let me give you an overview of the events. There will be four segregated functions every evening from June 25th to June 28th. The first function will be the henna celebration, followed by the musical night the next day. On 27th June, the wedding will take place which will be followed by the reception party. Therefore
, I request you to save the dates. Please inform me about your decision at your earliest convenience at my e-mail [email protected].
I look forward to a positive response.
yours sincerely,
Amandeep KaurSubmitted by immysandhu94 on
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Your letter is well-organized, but structuring your paragraphs to clearly separate different ideas would further enhance clarity. Consider starting a new paragraph when you shift from expressing appreciation to discussing event details.
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While you covered all the necessary points, providing more context about why you admire the photographer's work would make your appreciation more personalized.
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You have addressed all parts of the task comprehensively and clearly.
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Your tone is perfectly suited for a formal request letter, maintaining politeness and professionalism throughout.
coherence cohesion
Your greeting and closing are appropriate which contributes to the overall formality and clarity of your letter.
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Logical transitions between the different sections of the letter make it easy to follow.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite