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Some people fail in school, but end up being successful in life. Why do you think that is the case? What is the most important thing to succeed in life?

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There are many successful
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 around the world who were not great students. In my opinion, two main factors of industrious and adventurous in a person will lead him
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her to a prosperous future,
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 a well-trained
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 coach is a big advantage. Attending a university and being studious is not the only path to success. I believe it is more important to work hard and tackle the fear of failing. Many
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 are afraid to be unsuccessful to the point that they will not even try while Edison failed in his 1000
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 attempts to invent the light bulb. Another important virtue is risk-taking.
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 may have many different opportunities in their
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 but not all of them would risk facing new challenges.
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, Steve Jobs presented his idea to many
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 and only a few of them did take the risk to invest in it.
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 the above-mentioned issues and understanding consultants usually leads a person on the right path to success. An assiduous, creative, risk-taker should be aware of how to use his
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her abilities to flourish. A
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 coach can guide him
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her for every step and motivate him
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her in difficulties which may be one of the most important things to succeed. Regular consultations help
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 to find proper solutions and gain confidence to boot;
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, they will have the courage to trust the intrinsic. In conclusion,
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 can lead a thriving
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, even though they failed at school. It seems to me that some virtues
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 as hard-working and risk-taking are the main reasons and having good consultations could be the most important thing to thrive.
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