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Parents put a lot of pressure on children to succeed. Do you think this is good or bad?

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Nowadays many people consider that
parents
 should pressure their
children
 to achieve success. I completely disagree with the approach and
this
 essay will explore my viewpoints and argue in favour of the letter.
First
 of all, lots of people intend to pass studying abroad or build an empire business of
parents
' pressures. because
parents
 trust their
children
 to excel in school and get good grades to find a proper job in a nice company.
Furthermore
, youngsters could not find not only their own ambition but to get with high salary and a nice security work after finishing study as well. Because students' aim would be another ambition. they just choose to dream of their
parents
' childhood. After getting
parents
' aim
children
 would not have the motivation to move it towards.
Secondly
, dads and moms want to succeed in their
children
 in the future.
that is
 why most people take in part
children
 to more competition, due to getting the achievement. participation in several courses youngsters has a lot of choices to find profession henceforward.
parents
' influences make more amusement
children
 achieve dreams when the child has an own choice to if study abroad, what kind of profession. to sum up, I strongly suppose who influence their
children
 to achieve fame ,not by pressure
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