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Some people believe that in the near future there will be no borders between countries, while others feel that national borders will always remain. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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A group of people think that in the future countries across the world won'
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 have
boundaries
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;
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, others believe that they won'
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 change. In my personal view, the borders won'
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 alter but global inhabitants will globalize. On the one hand, today the number of international companies will increase;
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, the
boundaries
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 will be deleted.
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, if
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 trend is followed,
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 international citizens can interact with each other without any limitations and the economy will grow.
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, the main factor that does not let people travel and communicate with their peers is their Visa and the main band between import and export is the policy of countries.
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, the
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 are the main element that aid the community in saving their national identity, traditional norms, and historical places;
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, protecting countries from terrorism is the main goal of governments ;
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, the
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 won'
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 change .
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, people are going to follow the same situation as each other and they are going to globalization in their regular life but they want to save their cultural heritage.
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, today, global inhabitants follow the same fashion, buy the same electronic devices and so forth.
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, in my opinion, in the future the
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 will be as stable as the prior time inasmuch as populations like to follow their culture for some time and authorities like to protect their society from dangerous communities;
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, they become the same as each other in daily life.

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task achievement
Develop your introduction further by clearly stating the two opposing views and providing a more comprehensive overview of your stance.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that your paragraphs are logically connected and transition more smoothly between points. Try to use linking words for better coherence.
task achievement
Support your arguments with more specific examples that directly relate to the points you make. This will strengthen your ideas considerably.
task achievement
Your essay presents a clear opinion and discusses both sides of the argument, which shows an understanding of the task.
coherence and cohesion
You've included relevant vocabulary related to globalization and borders which is a positive aspect of your essay.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • borderless
  • globalization
  • cultural exchange
  • economic collaboration
  • national identity
  • sovereignty
  • immigration
  • security concerns
  • international cooperation
  • trade agreements
  • regional pacts
  • geopolitical tensions
  • consumer market
  • labor pool
  • resource sharing
  • cultural diversity
  • migration policies
  • transnational
  • integration
  • global citizenship
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