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Band 5.5

It is better to get advice from older people than young people .Agree or disagree ?

Some
people
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 argue that
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 it is better to get
advice
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 from
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elderly
people
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 than from the younger generation. I completely agree with
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 statement and in
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 I will support my opinions with examples.
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, when we talk of the elderly we talk of experience ,
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 group of
people
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 has seen it all and done it all. They are the best
people
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 to get
advice
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 from because they can relate to most of the current situations in their past. We can take our grandparents
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 example , my grandparents would
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 teach and guide me about different life situations which they experienced before when they were my age so that I could avoid facing difficulties in my life which made me
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be a better person. Another point to consider is that the older generation can give the best
advice
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 because they are more like teachers ,mentors to most
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 in families, jobs and communities. A growing body of research suggests that most of the companies in the world
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 have elderly employees prefer that the older individuals teach ,train and be advisers to the younger employees which led to the growth and development of many companies.
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, other individuals argue that the younger generation can give better
advice
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 because they have new mindsets which can lead to the development of our social lives and businesses. In conclusion,
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 It is a common belief that older individuals can give better
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 than the youth, I believe that it is better to get some
advice
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 from the elders.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • wisdom
  • experience
  • modern challenges
  • peer advice
  • long-term perspective
  • contextual relevance
  • diverse perspectives
  • generational gap
  • mentorship
  • cautionary tale
  • evolving societal norms
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