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The number of people suffering from health problems caused by a modern lifestyle which cannot be treated with modern medicines. Some people believe that alternative medicine can help. Do you agree that alternative medicines are effective?

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The fast-paced living style is leading to various health issues in individuals that cannot be cured by conventional
medicine
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 made from chemicals and can have a lot of side effects due to
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 fact community is opting for therapies like Ayurveda as a treatment option which I believe is safer and efficacious
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 to synthetic medication.
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 essay will substantiate my stand in the following paragraphs.
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, the utilisation of natural sources should be promoted to prepare medicines. It is a proven fact that elements of nature like trees, plants and herbs have medicinal values that can aid most
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the diseases.
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, leaves of eucalyptus can be used to treat cough and cold rather than some branded allopathic
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complex chemical formulations to provide a cure in a short time. Thereby, artificial drugs can be harmful if not consumed as per the prescription.
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, promoting natural drugs can be a better remedy to heal ailments.
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, even though there have been a lot of advancements in medical sciences, the present-day
medicine
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 manufactured sometimes is either not effective or
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side-effects
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. Proper testing needs to be performed before releasing it into the market.
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, though the COVID-19 initial pill that was released, reduced COVID symptoms to an extent
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 caused some brain-related issues, which
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 complained
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 most of the patients.
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 proves that the modern pill needs to be more effective. To summarize, not consuming natural medicines and the inability of contemporary medication are contributing factors to not
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from
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illnesses.
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 why there is a need for alternative
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. Upon detailed analysis
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this
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 subject, it can be concluded that the natural method of producing medicines is the most effective alternative way to cure ailments.
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