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In the past, people ate local food in season, but nowadays, people can buy a variety of food from all over the world. Do the advantages of this development outweigh it disadvantages?

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Advances in transport technology these years have enabled
people
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 to have more access to
food
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 from other regions. In my opinion, I think
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 trend can bring about more benefits for
people
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 compared with any drawbacks it might bring. Despite the drawbacks below, I believe the advantages gained from a rich variety of exotic
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 are extremely beneficial to residents.
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, their standard of living can be improved. More
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 transported from other regions provide them with more sources of nutrients and
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 develop a healthier diet.
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 is particularly helpful for
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 living in places with a limited range of local
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 in a particular season. Having more seafood, vegetables and fruits produced in other regions is conducive to their physical health.
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, local consumers can
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 enjoy a cut in
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 prices. When more produce can be transported from other places,
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 will inevitably increase competition in the
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 market, where producers of local
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 are highly likely to lower the price in order to promote their products
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. Admittedly, there are some issues involved when (as) exotic
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 become more available. One problem is that it might prevent
people
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 who are keen on exotic
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 from consuming local
foods
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 on a daily basis. As local
foods
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 play a crucial part in cultural identity, the decline in the popularity of these
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 might gradually be detrimental to the conservation of local culture. Another negative aspect is related to environmental protection. Transporting exotic
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 requires more energy consumption than taking local-produced ones to the market, so
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 trend is criticized by many environmentalists to be unsustainable.
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, I think
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 side effect can be countered by the development and promotion of electric vehicles that can be used in the shipping process. In conclusion, my opinion is that a healthier dietary habit and a lower
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 price engendered by easier availability of exotic
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 are truly favourable to individuals and clearly outweigh any disadvantages.

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