Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to look after their citizens themselves? Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and with relevant evidence. You should write at least 250 words.

There are two different points of view that it is necessary for the rich
people
to support unwealthy groups of society to fulfil their basic living needs while another opinion is that
governments
should take
responsibilities
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of
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for
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poor's
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the poor's
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food and education expenses. Both statements have strong reasons and arguments,
therefore
I partially agree with them and will be discussed the reasons in the following paragraphs.
To begin
with, the rich should help the poor
in
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with
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education and daily bread. It is
natural
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thing that every country has two types of
people
, some have money and others don't have even basic facilities
of
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for
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life.
Wealthy
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The wealthy
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class
should pay their
taxes
that
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apply
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will be a good
contribute
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in
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to
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the
country
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country's
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economy and help unwealthy
people
.
For example
,if a man runs a company, he will earn from it. is it true,
he
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that he
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is taking benefits from the country? So, he should honestly pay his tax that would be a chance to help poor
people
.
Furthermore
, they
also
must help them
volunteer
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.
In addition
to
this
,
governments
should
also
play a crucial role to facilitate poor
community
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communities
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. They should introduce some donation schemes for their
people
.
For instance
, when
people
pay governmental
taxes
on their purchasing or any other way. It is the responsibility of
governments
to collect and utilize their
taxes
.
However
, in my opinion,
this
is the best practice to collect money from
upper
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the upper
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class
in the form of
taxes
and
then
invest in to design
some
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of some
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free educational schemes. Along with the education, they
also
provide them weekly or monthly money or food packages. To conclude, as we already discussed both points of view
that
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upper
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the upper
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class
should help
lower
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the lower
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class
and
also
governments
should participate in
to collect
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collecting
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taxes
from rich
people
and
help
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helping
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the poor. I
also
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am also
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in favour of both and have explained above with some solid arguments.
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