«Some people think that governments should spend more money on sports facilities for top athletes. Others argue that this money should be spent for sports facilities for ordinary people. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.»

Many people opine that the governments ought to spend
much
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money
on sports facilities for
best
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sportsman
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and sportswoman. But others think that
this
money
should be spent
for
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on
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simple
athletes
. In my
opinion
, it is normal to have different views, but we should choose one right
opinion
. I think
,
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the ministries should spend
this
money
for
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on
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ordinary
sportsmen
or sportswomen , for their
developing
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and becoming the top
athletes
. According to the
first
opinion
, I think the governments should spend a little
money
not a lot
for
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best
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athletes
.
Money
is necessary to improve facilities for ordinary, beginner
athletes
.
In addition
,
sport
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professionals earn too much
money
from competitions ,so they don't need much
money
.
For instance
, football players earn enormous salaries rather
than
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other
sportsmen
.
Next
, according to the
second
opinion
, I opine that for ordinary
sportsmen
and sportswomen the society
spend
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much
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money
. And they are becoming well-known gradually, the governments had to support
money
as much as they can.
In addition
, I absolutely agree with others who think that
the
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society should spend more
money
for
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beginner
sportsmen
. To conclude, the government ought to spend
much
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a lot of
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money
for
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on
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sports facilities rather than
other specialty
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another specialty
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. Since
,
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I read
from
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article
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that only sports
specialty
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can quickly make the public well-known and famous.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • elite sports facilities
  • national pride
  • international events
  • participation
  • high-quality
  • performance
  • national representation
  • fairness
  • social issues
  • population health
  • well-being
  • accessible
  • inclusive
  • community involvement
  • sponsorship
  • endorsements
  • recreational facilities
  • inspire
  • younger generations
  • serious pursuit
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