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The advantages and disadvantages of wearing a uniform to work

#uniform #work
Nowadays, there are lots of
variety
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 occupations which have suitable uniforms. Put on special costume aa the
work
 is very important and may be necessary for a job because dressing
special
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 raiment protects the body and helps stand out from others. In
this
 essay, I will discuss
about
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positive aspects and some
inconvenience
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inconveniences
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 of wearing a
uniform
 to
work
. On one hand, in some companies and organizations putting on definite clothes is a duty of staff because it promotes the brands of the companies.
Moreover
, wearing specific costumes
on
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 the organizations gives
main
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 possibility easy
recognize
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 the co-workers.
For example
, the doctors put on determined white uniforms in order that the customers can distinguish personnel from clients in hospital or skip the employee to the client faster when
happen
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 an accident in the street.
In addition
, there are some professions
which
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 need
any
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safety
on
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in
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 their
work
 so
that
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they wear concrete
custom
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 to protect the body from injury.
For instance
, firefighters wear a helmet, boots and fireproof garb in order not to burn out when they put out the fire,
furthermore
, firemen's
uniform
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uniforms
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so
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 reliable that saving the people from the room which is on fire is not parlous.
On the other hand
, some of the major downsides of wearing a
uniform
 to
work
is
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 that most
the
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people do not want to dress
the
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 same design apparel every day. For many,
work
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uniform
 is uncomfortable and disliked
color
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. So it makes workers feel inconvenient and unconfident at
work
. To conclude, in spite of
drawbacks
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 of getting dressed in
uniform
, there are many useful and helpful sides
such
 as rapidly recognizable and
protecting
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. To my way of thinking, I would prefer getting into clothes
what
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that
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 I want
on
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 my
work
 even though distinctive tog has many advantages.
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