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Some people believe that is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is often argued that
information
 should be conveyed as much as possible to the public in scientific research,
business
, and the academic world.
In contrast
, others think that there are figures that ought not to be published.
This
 essay agrees with the former rather than the latter view.
Information
 should be public, which has potential damage to massive numbers of people, and some data cannot be published because of the
business
 competitor. The community needs to be aware of certain details, significantly if it will affect millions of people's lives.
This
 is to say that society has the privilege to be informed with the data, which includes technological advancement, updated learning, and most certain newly discovered diseases.
For instance
, the Covid-19 pandemic affected millions of people's lives and shut down the planet for more than two years.
Moreover
, with
this
 kind of detailed data, society has the liberty to be aware.
On the other hand
, some
information
 should be kept because of
business
 competition.
This
 means that if the
information
 is broadcast, it has the potential that the success of his institution can be copied by his competitor. Because of the rival, the competitor strives to apply their most excellent and eternal
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 up of products.
For instance
, according to the research done by the student council in University Abry in February 2020 student paper, 86% of the participants in the aggregate
business
 are not sharing their product
information
. In conclusion,
This
 essay support that a piece of specific
information
 to have aware the society because of potential massive damage, and some figures can be kept for
business
 opponents.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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