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The modern-day world is growing more and more dependent on technology. What technologies do you think are going to be important in near future?

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In recent years,
technology
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the technology
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 sectors
are
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have been
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 improving without a break.I believe that
Aritificial
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Artificial
 Intelligence (AI) and modern
automation
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tools
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 will be dominant in efficiency.
Ai
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AI
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 will redefine and lead to
reestimate
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reevaluate
work
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 balance in
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work places
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workplaces
.
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, nowadays in IT and robotics manufacturing industries have been using
automation
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tools
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 that
helps
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help
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 to create and gain
productiv
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productive
 results.
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,
Automation
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 enables employees to complete repetitive tasks effortlessly and
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 helps to identify issues beforehand.
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 makes people
work
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 less and stay motivated
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focuses
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 on their business.
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,
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 shift enables employees to reduce their manual workload, maintain higher levels of motivation, and focus their energy on the creative and strategic aspects of their business.
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, contemporary automated
tools
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 are
started are
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beginning to be
utilized
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 in the medical field.
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, nowadays
vast
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a vast
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of
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amount of
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 equipments are boosted and automated
at the
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 hospitals and
healthy
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health
 services.
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 method
makes to
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helps
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 find issues and llnesses on patients compared to traditional methods. Equipments show everything on screen clearly and
detailed
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in detail
 with
helping
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a helping
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automation
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 tool. In conclusion, Artificial Intelligence (AI) and Automated
Tools
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 in
healthy
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healthcare
 services will take
prominent
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a prominent
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 role in the coming years. By
revolutionizing
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revolutionising
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 how we
work
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 and how we treat disease, these technologies will ensure a more productive and healthier society in the coming years.

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task response
Answer the question more fully. You name AI and automation, but you can say more about why they will be important in the near future.
coherence and cohesion
Use clearer main ideas in each body part. Start each part with one clear point, then explain it.
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Add one more specific example. This will make your ideas stronger and easier to trust.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like also, because, for example, and as a result.
coherence and cohesion
Check each sentence for grammar and word form, because some lines are hard to understand and this affects how clear your ideas are.
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You answer the topic and stay on it through the essay.
coherence and cohesion
You have an introduction, body parts, and a conclusion.
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You use examples from work and health care, which helps your answer.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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