Nowadays many people travel to foreign countries for pleasure. Some believe this travel has a negative impact on the countries travelled to. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Without a doubt, travelling stays one of the most impressive ways of having
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pleasure
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pleasure
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that having a journey might be harmful to the countries those welcome tourists, which is nonsense. The essay is going to discuss how the enjoyment taken by
tourism
and what are the negative sides of that. The origin of the modern concept of
tourism
was found in
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century and
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stays the best way of getting fresh impressions. It is proved by Cornell University in 2017 that spending money on new experiences makes people
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happier than
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spending money on physical objects.
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happens due to the ability
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. When an individual purchases a usable item
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they get used to
this
in a short time.
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, they cannot take a periodical
pleasure
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this
way.
On the other hand
, travelling or
tourism
sometimes have a negative impact on states who receives
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. There are several ways of making
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harm: ecological, social, etc. It is considered that the tourists always polluting the environment,
moreover
there are some types of having
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fun, which
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not possible without harming the ecology (plane flights, ship journeys). Especially for these
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the
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eco-
tourism
appears.
Also
, nowadays some states cannot maintain their economical conditions without providing travel places.
For example
, UAE collects about $10 billion in one year due to
tourism
. To sum up,
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travelling makes everybody happier and must appear. As well as the harm can be ignored in return for the
pleasure
and becoming a successful/developed country.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural exchanges
  • Global connections
  • Tourism boosts
  • Local economy
  • Over-tourism
  • Environmental degradation
  • Landmarks
  • Commodification of culture
  • Authentic cultural expressions
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Tourism infrastructure
  • Public services
  • Disrespect local customs
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