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Nowadays many people prefer to be self employed tayher than work for a company. What disadvatages being self employed can has?

Many people like to be self-employed
instead
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 of working for a firm nowadays,but it can have many disadvantages. In
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 I will explain some of them.
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 being self-employed can have many advantages, it has many disadvantages.At
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,being self-employed has a high
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 of responsibility.
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, if one of your employees is unsatisfied with his
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, you are responsible for that.
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, because of these ,
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responsibilities you do not have enough
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 for your family and friends.
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, when you are self-employed you do not have rutin
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work
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 as other employees, so, sometimes you may have to spend more than 10 hours at
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,at the beginning of running a
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 your income can be few , you should have a plan for your income and expenditure for a while.
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,having your own business may have a high
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 of risk too.
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, in many countries, in order to a bad economical situation lot of businesses have been broken and they should pay their instalments to the bank or the government. In conclusion, having a business can have many cons
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 as a high
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 of responsibility, not having enough
time
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, not having rutin
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 to
work
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 and a high
level
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 of risk.

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