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Many wild animals are on the verge of extinction. What are some reasons for this? How can animals be protected?

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A great number of our planet's inhabitants are being
extincted
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extinct
 day by day. The human footprint in
this
 predicament is irrefutable.
Although
 there are many means that human has
acselerated
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accelerated
animals
 extinction,
governments
 as the most responsible authorities can prevent its continuity. Human is not the only species but the most prominent one
that is
 affecting
environment
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, especially in a negative way. One of the most concerning impacts is
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climate change. Manmade emissions, greenhouse gases, and exhaust fumes have led to
the
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global warming, which is threatening many of species'
existance
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existence
.
For example
, the increase in the arctic temperature has resulted in
the
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 decrease
of
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polar
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bears
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 population.
Besides
 it, mankind is contaminating nature, which is directly taking a lot of
animals
' lives. A good example of it is the dumping of toxic waste and its subsequent water contamination that poisons
animals
.
Moreover
, acid rain is not only killing these inhabitants but
also
 destructing their habitats.
This
 directly contributes to their suffering and extinction. Despite the so-called human impacts
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irrepairable
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irreparable
,
governments
 can deter its progression. One practical solution for tackling climate change is for
governments
 to invest in green and environmentally friendly sources of energy.
For instance
, by giving loans to the electronic car factories, they can reduce carbon
emission
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, which leads to
the
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 decrease in world temperature.
In addition
, if they pass strict rules against the usage of toxic chemicals and the
desposal
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disposal
 of them into
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nature, they will not be contaminated.
Consequently
,
governments
 can address
this
 problem by modifying humans behaviours and habits. To sum up, human negligence is killing millions of
animals
 by affecting their optimal living situation or contaminating their food and ecosystem.
This
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climate
calamity
clarity
 can be mitigated by the government's intervention.
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