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Nowadays many people travel to foreign countries for pleasure. Some believe this travel has negative impact on the countries travelled to, To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Travelling around the world become
widespread
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 hobby. It widens horizons, enriches life
experience
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experiences
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 and makes good memories. There are people, who consider that
tourists
 affect negatively to countries, where they came to.
However
, I am largely in agreement with the fact that
travelers
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travellers
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 bring benefits rather than having
negative
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a negative
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 impact.
First
 of all,
high
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 wave of
tourists
 positively
affect
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to
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the
countries
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country's
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 economy.
Tourists
 tend to buy presents for their relatives while travelling.
Moreover
,
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wave
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a wave
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 of
tourists
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,tourists
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 the number of places
such
 as
hotel
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hotels
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 or restaurant increase,
consequently
,
unemployment
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the unemployment
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 rate of
country
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the country
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 will witness
decrease
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.
For example
, according to research conducted in 2013, in Turkey,
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every summer, the employment rate
increased
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to
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 0.5
percent
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per cent
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 related to the wave of
tourists
.
Furthermore
, travelling around the world provides
exchange
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an exchange
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 of lifestyle, culture and food. Owing to it, people are on
this
 level of
growing
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.
For instance
, globalization
lead
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leads
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 to the development of
cousin
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cousins
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 in many countries.
However
, negative impacts are
of
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no exception. Destruction of nature, pollution or propaganda can happen while there are
tourists
.
Also
, cultural shock may bring difficulties, misunderstanding and lead to bad relations between two nations. In conclusion, there can be moments, when
tourists
 bring
negative
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a negative
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 impact
to
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on
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 the nations they
travelled
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travel
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 to, including pollution, destruction of nature, but considering
positive
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the positive
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 impacts they have, in my opinion advantages outweigh them
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural exchanges
  • Global connections
  • Tourism boosts
  • Local economy
  • Over-tourism
  • Environmental degradation
  • Landmarks
  • Commodification of culture
  • Authentic cultural expressions
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Tourism infrastructure
  • Public services
  • Disrespect local customs
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