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In many societies in the world, the population is aging rapidly and this is leading to an unsustainable increase in the cost of public healthcare.  A nation’s population should pay for their healthcare provision in the future. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is undeniable that the proportion of the age of residents is changing dramatically over the decades, which means the
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 have to spend more money to develop
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. I think that
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 issue must be a
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 duty. In the following paragraphs, the reasons to support my opinion will be outlined in detail. It is often thought that the
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 has already kept the taxes from citizens. In fact, the
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 has kept the taxes from corporate income tax, individual income, and value-added tax, which means residents tend to pay a lot of tax.
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, the
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 should have enough money to invest in the
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 system.
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, it is commonly believed that the
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 has three main responsibilities, which mean issuing laws, protecting the country and helping citizens.
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, the
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 should be more concerned about public services, especially in
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.
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, the
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 can subsidize the population by pay their
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.
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,
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 paying for their own
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 provider might be disadvantaged, which means it has more convenient.
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 to say,
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 can be easier to manage their time with many choices and not have any complicated steps to access the
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 system.
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, the number of
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 using a private hospital has significant rise over the period. In conclusion, I strongly agree with the view that
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 should be pay by the
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 because it is the
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's duty.
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, telling
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 to pay for their
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 would be a choice and depend on what citizens want.
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