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Some people believe that education is the key to tackling hunger worldwide while others feel that the answer is in food aid. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There has been a significant divergence of
opinion
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 revolving around that education is the key to fighting
hunger
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 worldwide, whether some think
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food
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 support.
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, in my
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, the best tool for
save
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 lives in the face of
hunger
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 is
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emergency
food
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 aid.
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, I firmly support the latter view.
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 essay will examine both sides. On the one hand, I want to mention the cause of
hunger
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. These are conflicts, and climate change, where the main role is played by human activity, including the level of ignorance of humanity. The after-effects of the COVID-19 pandemic contribute to a sharp increase in the number of hungry people according to the report of The World
Food
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 Programme. Eliminating the threat of
hunger
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 and completely preventing
hunger
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 will require longer-term and more complex interventions, including strengthening education.
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, many people hold
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opinion
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.
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, along with emergency
food
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 aid, advanced technologies, logistics supply chains are
also
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 the main measures to combat
hunger
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. Since the topic under discussion is fighting the consequences, namely
hunger
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 worldwide, and not the cause of
hunger
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, I support the previous
opinion
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. According to the report of The World
Food
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 Programme «Fighting famine» in Yemen,
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Food
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 Programme’s largest-ever
scale up
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 of
food
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 assistance, from 1 million people in 2015 to nearly 13 million helped avert famine in 2019. In a conclusion, it can hardly be denied that famine cannot be inevitable - with proper planning and coordination, it can be prevented and millions of lives saved. using various tools both to prevent
hunger
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 and to respond to it.
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