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To achieve international sporting success, many countries build specialized facilities for the training of top athletes, instead of providing sports facilities that everyone can use. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Constructing professional
sports
facilities
 is really indispensable for a nation's
sports
 undertakings, and some approve that in order to achieve a higher score in international competitions, top
athletes
 should have the right to use them while the public cannot. Personally, I totally agree with that. As we all know, those
athletes
 with high levels are really difficult to achieve a self-satisfied score in an international competition like the summer and winter Olympics. And at the same time, well-developed and specialized training
facilities
 can play an essential role in getting in touch with the champing cup for each
sports
 player. Using all of the practising equipment without any disturbing from outside can help
athletes
 concentrate fully on their training for skills.
For example
, if the national team can be trained in a specialized court, they definitely can have more time to do professional exercises,
that is
 to say, the team members will be more efficient to improve their body condition and
sports
 skills. So, preventing from sharing training
facilities
 with the public can avoid the organizer from paying too much attention to executive management, which is beneficial for exploiting top
athletes
 to pursue their targets. After that, they can be more competitive when engaging in world-class
sports
 events. Admittedly, letting the public use those
facilities
 can improve the publicizing of
sports
 in the whole country because only when the majority of people have an awareness of the importance of doing
sports
, the so-called success of these countries can become more flourish.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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