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Some believe that tourism does more to create tension between countries rather than helping individuals better understand other cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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There is no doubt the fact that tourism is a very important thing for individuals and countries. Nowadays, travelling is easier because of the low cost and the better performance of the booking process. Everyone is passionate about exploring the world.
First
 of all, lands that open their gates for others are welcoming them to their cultures before anything else. They allow them to be a part of the country for a period of time, showing them the greatness of the people and the variety of food and clothes. Let them be willing to hear and understand their language.
Moreover
, support them to visit historical places and invite them to the available adventures. On other hand, some people tend to be upset about going out of their home country. They believe in misunderstanding while communicating with foreign ones. Problems are the
first
 thing that comes to their mind, and it is because of different languages, habits and cultures.
Also
, they are finding obstacles when it comes to food and how to find a good restaurant.
For example
, when Muslims travel to a non-muslim place, it is not easy to find halal food. In my opinion,
this
 earth becomes a small town. We can notice, that all products are easy to get and it is in each step. And when it comes to speaking, our smartphone has all letters and words that we never knew about.
Furthermore
, in every room conflicts may happen, but the key is how to manage the situation and look for the bright side to follow the best way out.
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