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Some people say that now is the best time in history to be living. What is your opinion about this? What other time in history would be interesting to live in?

#people #time #history
Nowadays, some
people
 argue that we are living in the best
time
 in history. In
this
 essay,
i
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 would like to give my opinion about
this
 argument and discuss other
time
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times
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 in history that
people
 would like to live in. In my point of view, it is true that now is the best
time
 to live in because
of
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a
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 main reason. The most important reason is that we are living in modern civilisation. Due to the development of technology,
human
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humans
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 are experiencing
convenient
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a convenient
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lifestyle
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lifestyles
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.
For instance
, in recent
year
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years
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, there are many cutting-edge household
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
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 that help women decrease pressure in household life
such
 as
dish
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dishwasher
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washer
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washers
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, washing
machine
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machines
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or
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and
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 vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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. The other example is that because of globalisation,
people
 are reducing the
time
 to communicate with each other
through
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 using modern technology facilities. In the past,
people
 need to take two days or more than one month to send letters or messages to their family.
However
, nowadays
people
 just take two minutes to call and see their family
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through
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though
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through
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the smart
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smart phone
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smartphone
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.
On the other hand
, some
people
 believe that there is other
time
 that
people
 would like to live
such
 as in the past.
Although
people
 did not have modern technology in the past, they still felt happy and interesting.
This
 is because
people
 can spend spare
time
on
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talking and playing together
instead
 of focusing on social media and
smart phone
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smartphone
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.
Besides
 that, in the
past
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people
 did not have to face
with
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a lot of
enviromental
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environmental
 problems
such
 as air pollution and global warming compared
with
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now.
Therefore
, some
people
 think that
past
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the past
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 may be
good
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a good
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time
 to live in In conclusion, it seems to me that now is the best
time
 to live but
human
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humans
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 should have stable development to keep the best things
in
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from
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 the past.
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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unprecedented
  • prosperity
  • technological advancements
  • global connectivity
  • longevity
  • opportunities
  • self-expression
  • renaissance
  • exploration
  • industrial revolution
  • roaring twenties
  • unparalleled
  • groundbreaking
  • transformative
  • revolutionary
  • epoch-making
  • flourished
  • transcended
  • innovations
  • distinguished
  • renaissance artists
  • explorers
  • innovative entrepreneurs
  • exhilarating
  • era
  • unforgettable
  • boom
  • vibrant
  • exuberant
  • transformed
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