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The internet contains a lot of information however sometimes this information is inaccurate or wrong to what extent do you agree or disagree?

#internet #information
It is often believed by many that
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 of details about various sectors; educational; geographical and political.
Although
, occasionally
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 details are unethical or false. I, partially agree with
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On the other hand
, it is true that
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cyberspace
 contains
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of
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data regarding each
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 across the world.
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is less accurate at some
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. The foremost reason behind
this
 is it may be unauthentic.
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the
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 instructions on different sites can be written by any person in lieu of professionals.
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, the facts are not trustworthy as it has lack
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particular evidence. It has been observed that in
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recent days
 many people write their own blogs and articles on special sites according to their experience and knowledge.
Nevertheless
, it may not
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 for every individual in
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society. For an instance, the website called learning
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a language
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 in which any person can share techniques to master the language may not suitable for everyone. Some methods are not appropriate or false. On the
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other hand
, many people argue that information available on search
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 always accurate.
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, they
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 details that people obtain from the offline material are likely to create
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confusion. Whereas, the same data mankind can verify from the internet. For
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, some crucial information
such
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number
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numbers
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 and
address
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 of government places can effortlessly identify through google within
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 seconds.
Therefore
, it can
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 to find
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an appropriate
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 location.
Moreover
, an educational
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 internet plays
essential
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 role in research.
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 from using the highspeed net In conclusion, notwithstanding the unauthenticity of some articles can lead
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reduce
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 the accuracy
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of
 given
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statistics
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 received from the hyperspace.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cybersecurity
  • phishing
  • identity theft
  • misinformation
  • fake news
  • social isolation
  • internet addiction
  • data privacy
  • digital literacy
  • regulations
  • awareness programs
  • manipulate
  • proliferation
  • consent
  • escalated
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