Childhood obesity is becoming a serious problem in many countries. Explain the main causes and effects of this problem, and suggest some possible solutions.
Children
's health
are
increasingly deteriorating by fatness throughout the world, even condition is pretty alarming among the world's most affluent western countries.There are a number of Change the verb form
is
reason
causing Fix the agreement mistake
reasons
this
problem
and each problem
needs to be dealt in
a particular way.
It is likely that one of the most prominent Change preposition
with in
cause
giving rise to Change to a plural noun
causes
this
problem
is the major change in our lifestyle due to remarkable advancement and shophistication
in technology, which has Correct your spelling
sophistication
considerable
impact on our daily life and Correct article usage
a considerable
health
.These
advancement comes at a cast with Change the determiner
This
the
adverse impact on our Correct article usage
an
health
due to lack of physical activity and laziness in office
and home.At Correct article usage
the office
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the office
office
most of the Add a comma
,office
poeple
suffering from Correct your spelling
people
this
illness spend many hours sitting in front of the computer without any physical activity.Not only this
even at home most of us spend time watching TV and taking rest at
Change preposition
in
their
bedroom.Even Correct pronoun usage
our
children
nowadays give preference to playing computer
Add an article
a computer
game
or chatting on Fix the agreement mistake
games
internet
with their friends rather than playing Add an article
the internet
Correct your spelling
outdoor
out door
sports.Correct your spelling
outdoor
In addition
to that
the quality of foods which we Add a comma
,that
consumes
every day made the matters worse.These foods , which are easily available ,Change the verb form
consume
oftenly
contains ingredients that are high in calorie ,Correct your spelling
often
cholestral
and fat , while at the same time lack necessary vitamin , mineral and Correct your spelling
cholesterol
protien
and these factors are taking a toll on our Correct your spelling
protein
health
.
Moreover
, these significant changes has
begun showing up adverse effect on our Change the verb form
have
health
.Children
from many country
are suffering from obesity , fatness and fatness related diseases Change to a plural noun
countries
such
as heart disease , Correct your spelling
cancer
cancel
and sugar.Correct your spelling
cancer
As a
result
it is Add a comma
,result
imperating
that we should fight collectively hand in hand against Correct your spelling
imperative
importing
this
huge problem
before it poses a threat to our health
system.
In my opinion, teachers, parent
and Fix the agreement mistake
parents
Correct your spelling
government
goverment
as a whole should take Correct article usage
the goverment
this
issue as a matter of urgency and take necessary
Add an article
the necessary
step
to Fix the agreement mistake
steps
Correct your spelling
overcome
over come
at every Correct your spelling
overcome
stages
.Change to a singular noun
stage
For
instance
parents are expected to keep an eye on Add a comma
,instance
thier
Correct your spelling
their
children
's eating habit
and make sure they take healthy food while reducing the Fix the agreement mistake
habits
quanity
of luring junk food.Government can contribute by Correct your spelling
quantity
quality
puting
a ban on unhealthy items Correct your spelling
putting
specialy
prepared Correct your spelling
specially
keeping
in mind Change the verb form
to keep
to
Change preposition
apply
children
.
To conclude, although
many countries are now a days
falling prey to unhealthy diet Correct the word
nowadays
but
we can fight and defeat Remove the conjunction
apply
this
menace with strong will power
and Correct your spelling
willpower
taking
some preventive actions as described above.Change preposition
by taking
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