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All cars, trucks and buses will be driverless vehicles in the future, and people will only be passengers.

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Roads in the future are likely to be filled with
vehicles
 that drive themselves with people as mere passengers.
Although
driverless
vehicles
 may have difficulty sensing and reacting to their environment, those
limitations
 will eventually be overcome, and
driverless
vehicles
 will be safer and more reliable than human
drivers
. Opponents of
driverless
 cars often cite the
limitations
 of their sensory equipment to argue against their use.
Driverless
vehicles
 use lasers and cameras to detect their environment, but these can be adversely affected by weather. Heavy rainfall interferes with lasers, and snow can cover camera lenses. These systems may not recognize obstacles like potholes or debris on roads that can cause accidents.
In addition
, robots have a hard time reading road signs, so they are completely reliant on GPS and programmed computer data like maps. When there are changes in road conditions like repair work or public events, they may not be aware of the situation.
However
, as technology advances, and streets are upgraded to accommodate
driverless
vehicles
, these
limitations
 will be overcome. Proponents of
driverless
vehicles
,
however
, can provide ample evidence that robot
drivers
 will be superior to humans in terms of safety and reliability. Human
drivers
 are impulsive so they often bend or break rules
while
 driving, and they often take unnecessary risks.
Conversely
,
driverless
vehicles
 will always strictly obey every driving rule and regulation.
Moreover
, computers cannot become tired or inebriated, nor can they be distracted or daydream. Over 80% of car accidents in the US are the result of driver error, but computers don't make mistakes. They are inherently perfect
drivers
, so traffic accidents would be greatly reduced if not eliminated completely. The
vehicles
 would
also
 coordinate with each other, which would make traffic flow more smoothly. Traffic jams and bottlenecks would be a thing of the past, and commuting times would be dramatically reduced. In conclusion,
although
driverless
vehicles
 have some
limitations
due to
 their sensory equipment and programming, those problems will be solved.
Therefore
, the advantages of
driverless
vehicles
 like safety and reliability far outweigh the current disadvantages.
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