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Write a letter to the manager of the bus company. In your letter • describe what the problems are • explain how these problems are affecting you • suggest what you would like the company to do

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to raise a
concer
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concern
 related to the reliability of
bus
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 service in my hometown that
have
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has
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 arisen over the past two weeks. As a regular passenger, who has been
traveling
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travelling
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 almost
everyday
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every day
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 by
bus
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 number 102 for almost 1 year from Batala to Amritsar. Unfortunately, the
bus
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 scheduled at 7:15 AM has been experiencing
a
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frequent delays, which is really disappointing. Yesterday, the
bus
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departured
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departed
 at 7:40 AM
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, which
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 represents an irresponsible behaviour of the
bus
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 driver. Basically, I travel to the office daily, which starts at 8:00 AM, but because of the irregularity in trasnportion, it is causing serious concerns in my professional life. I have already received a verbal warning from my employer for lateness.
Thus
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, I kindly request you to find a solution of
this
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 issue. If it is permitted, I may suggest some solutions; like as, there should be a strict schedule for each
bus
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.
In addition
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, more vehicles can be added to maintain the stability on the routes. Thank you for considering my concerns.I look forward to seeing improvements in your
bus
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 service. Yours faithfully, Kaur

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structure
Make the order of ideas clear: first the problem, then its effect, then the solution.
structure
Try to use one big idea in each paragraph.
grammar
Check small spelling and grammar mistakes.
content
Be precise about time and place when you say what happened.
tone
Keep a formal and polite tone throughout.
tone
Polite tone and clear request to fix the issue.
content
It lists the problems, impact, and a plan to fix.
structure
It has a clean start and end with greeting and closing.
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