Some people think living in big cities is bad for people’s health. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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I could not agree more that living in metropolice makes your health get worse. On one hand, there are several reasons that make urban life unhealthy.

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so it causes a lot of

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that we have to get through it every day. As we can see that traffic is terrible in a center of the city

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as Bangkok,

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huge number of cars and is bad for our lungs.

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, due to hurry habits in the big

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people are always busy and do not have much time to take care of themselves so it makes them unhappier. Some of them feel burned out or some had a hurry sickness which leads to being

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other diseases

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like Obesity and depression.

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, people who live in the city will get a better chance to access

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high technologies of health care,

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good hospitals and

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the full option of a fitness centre or large parks near their home to build their body to be

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healthier. In

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if you lived in the upcountry you may have to drive around half an hour to find a hospital or clinic and the quality of equipment is quite inferior to in the cities.

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conclusion, life in the urban may have a lot of risks to be unhealthy but on the other

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it makes

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easier to access fitness

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or parks to be better quality of health than

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cities.

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