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Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many healthy problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less s

#food #drink #products #levels #sugar #people
The two maps showcase a public park when it opened
initially
 in 1920 and
analogous
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 park
today
. In general, the basic modifications
made
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were made
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 to the western and eastern
area
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areas
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 of the
map
. In terms of 1920, there was a fountain in the middle of the
map
, but
today
, there have been a rose
garden
 with four seats as a substitute to the
Furthermore
, on the
left hand
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 side of the fountain, we could see the stage for musicians in 1920.
However
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 there had been
a
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an
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amphitheater
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amphitheatre
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 for concerts as a replacement
of
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for
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previous
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the previous
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 building.
The
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 bottom side of the stage for musicians there was a rose
garden
in
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apply
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1920.
Although
, we have been able to witness that there
have
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 been no rose
garden
today
 and the southwest and the northwest sides' seats have
demolished
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in
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on
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today
's
map
. When it comes to the eastern territory of the
map
, there was a pound water
plants
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 in 1920, but
today
, the
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children's
childrens
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 play area has been constructed there.
Instead
 of the water feature has been built a replacement of
english
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 house
in
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on
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 the
second
map
, and there has been removed with the seats which had been located in
Southeast
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 part of the
map
. The cafe
garden
 has been allocated
instead
 of
rose
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the rose
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garden
,
today
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Overconsumption
  • Obesity
  • Diabetes
  • Heart disease
  • Public health
  • Taxation
  • Purchasing decisions
  • Education campaigns
  • Economic implications
  • Subsidizing
  • Healthier alternatives
  • Disproportionately
  • Low-income families
  • Personal responsibility
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