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Some people think that being able to communicate with others online is breaking down geographical barriers and enabling people, who would normally never have the chance to meet, to communicate. What are the advantages of international communication online? Are there any disadvantages to this?

#people #barriers #chance #communication
Nowadays, the
internet
 has become more essential in ours, without the
internet
 we are nothing. One of these, social media, made life easier than past.
However
, there are both pros and cons to deciding to do those. In
this
 essay , I will discuss some of the reasons why communication on the
internet
 is advantageous. Let's begin by looking at the advantages of making life easier and getting opportunities to know about another culture and improve our skills.
Secondly
, we can make new friends and
this
 is beneficial for my relationship. Turning to the other side of the argument, culture shock of a major problem. Many people find it hard to cope with language. Another issue is may we can meet someone they are not good behaviour especially for children if they are using the
internet
 for games and there's a lot of bullying people . All things considered, the
internet
 is good for communication if you're an adult and know what you do ,
however
, it can be a disadvantage if we don't know how to meet its theme.
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