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Some people think that schools should choose students according to their academic abilities, while others think it is better to have students of different abilities studying together. Discuss both views and state your own opinion.

#people #schools #students #abilities
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In modern societies, most people believe in the necessity of academic education, reaching
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a good situation
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 the oncoming of their children.
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However
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 some others think
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 and see no problem in gathering
students
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 with different abilities together. Both aspects would be discussed here. As the global population increases and technology
developes
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, humans, find that there would be no chance for their
offsprings
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, to stay in the
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 competition, except
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to learn academic abilities.
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, according to their capabilities, promote their kids
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 to the best schools which are available. They prefer their children’s classmates
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 studious and provide motivation for them. So, if some pupils dislike classical education, it is better to stay away from conventional classes and find another way of gaining skills. Considerably,
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 is the contemplation of most teachers and school owners. Others
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 believe,
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 that
students
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 with different interests and abilities, could stay together in a class,
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 would promote peer learning. So, it would be one of the best kinds of teaching in
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area
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. Unless, organizing classes that include
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 of
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similar talent and genius, makes no innovative development in pupils.
Students
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 could learn many things
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 each other,
then
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,
educational
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statue
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 should not separate
students
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 with dissimilar
attitude
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. In conclusion, both aspects are acceptable somehow but getting judicious
decision
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 according to different situations and types and needs of
students
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 is appropriate and it is related to
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a
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powerful educational academia.
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