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It will be better to have wide use of driverless cars for individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

#driverless #cars #individuals #society
As
technology
 has advanced dramatically, there are an enormous number of electric
cars
 with automatic driving recently. When it comes to automatic
cars
, people hold conflicting views that they should be wild used by the public. My personal view is that I agree that the positive aspects of
driverless
cars
 outweigh the negative effects. Some people argue that
driverless
cars
 could not be used prevalently by humans yet, which has still potential risks on it. The reason behind
this
 is that the
technology
 of automatic driving has been immature to use widely, which means there lots of problems take place when driving.
For example
, a piece of news about an accident in an automatic driving car which could not be controlled and drove the wrong way caused large injuries and death.
As a result
, some humans unbelieve in
driverless
cars
 on account of the unacceptable accident by immature
technology
.
Although
 it can be argued that there are certainly risks to
driverless
cars
, I am in favour of automatic driving
cars
 being able to benefit society.
According to
 several pieces of research, a huge part of traffic accidents is caused by human mistakes, which are even avoidable issues.
For example
, workers are too tired to drive which led them to be distracted, and they are not paying attention to road situations
such
 as pedestrians, traffic lights, and the speed of
cars
, which situation always makes accidents.
Hence
driverless
cars
 could help drivers prevent human mistakes. In conclusion, even though a small part of automatic driving
technology
 should be improved, I still agree that
this
 is able to benefit humans.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • autonomous vehicles
  • artificial intelligence (AI)
  • sensors
  • human error
  • traffic congestion
  • mobility
  • displacement
  • fuel efficiency
  • carbon footprint
  • pollution control
  • ethical considerations
  • legal framework
  • data privacy
  • overreliance
  • system failures
  • connectivity
  • decision-making
  • security concerns
  • economic impact
  • maintenance
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