You have been busy with your studies for the past month and haven't had time to visit your family. Write a letter to your grandmother. In your letter: •Apologize for not getting in touch with her sooner •Explain why you have been so busy •Arrange a time to visit You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Grandmother,

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Dear grandma, I hope you're doing well. I'm writing to you to apologize

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connected with you in the

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few weeks. First of all, I'm going to explain the reason for

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, owing to an annual exam at the medical college in Mumbai from 30th November to 25 December; I

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to get time for myself and my family from student life. Today I've done all

examinations

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the examinations

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and I forgot that

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I have my

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own family and friends just to pass

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semester with excellent marks

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today I

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mind to send a letter to you regarding telling reasons behind my busy schedule. Spending time with family is a spectacular moment for every hostel student who is far distance from their parents. In order to enjoy

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time, I book a ticket for $390 for myself to meet you, Mumma, Papa and a bro from Prince Rupert to Calarey. I

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think that I should buy gifts for you and

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apologies

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to you for having more busy in my own life. I'm coming on 30th December! Can't wait to meet with you. Looking forward to catching up soon ! Love Navpreet Kaur

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Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea to maintain clarity.

coherence cohesion

Improve logical connections between sentences for better flow.

coherence cohesion

The greeting and closing of the letter are warm and appropriate, demonstrating a good rapport.

task achievement

The writing tone is suitable for a letter to a family member, showing familiarity and affection.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

195 words

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