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Eventually, technology will solve the most important environmental problems the world faces today. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The advancement of
technology
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 has inevitably influenced numerous human activities. At
first
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,
machines
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 and robots were developed with very limited function and capability. Nowadays, though, almost everything is done by
machines
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 and robots. Some
people
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 argue these newly innovated
machines
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 are the most reliable and dependable to solve the environmental damage that has occurred within the previous decades. Surely, I do believe that
technology
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 will assist us in repairing the
environment
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.
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, I strongly disagree that it is addressed as the most essential
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 since the human factors play a much bigger role in my opinion. With the
use
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 of advanced
technology
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, the process of restoring the
environment
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 becomes more efficient.
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, major parts of the world are using biodegradable
plastic
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 bags that could be crushed naturally by soil within a few years.
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, the development of vehicles that do
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 biogas
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 of fuel
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 reduces global warming. Regardless, these new features may be meaningless if not accompanied by the
people
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's responsibility toward the
environment
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.
People
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 are responsible for innumerable activities that harm the
environment
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,
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 as deforestation which leads to global warming,
plastic
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use
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 that results in water pollution, as well as trash accumulation that causes floods. These problems obviously cannot be solved solely through the development of
machines
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. I believe that human behaviour should be changed.
People
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 should be aware of the impact of these activities, so they will not be repeated and cause
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 problems.
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,
although
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 the newly manufactured
plastic
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 is eco-friendly,
people
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 should
use
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 it in moderation.
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, while discarding the
plastic
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, the trash should be separated so it will be handled properly and does not spoil the marine ecosystem. In conclusion, while
technology
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 is beneficial in restoring the environmental damage, I believe that the human factors are more crucial in
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 aspect, as we are the ones who will utilize these
machines
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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