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"should smoking in public spaces be banned"? give your views

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Smoking is a very dangerous and abhorrent habit, unfortunately, it has become very popular all over the world .smoking is an addiction because tobacco contains nicotine, which is very addictive and makes it difficult for a smoker to quit. I think outdoor and indoor smoking should be banned for many reasons:
first
, Smoking harms all organs of the body, and it causes many serious and fatal diseases
such
 as lung cancer, heart diseases, breathing problems and respiratory conditions, diabetes, dental and vision problems as well, weakens the immune system. by smoking cigarette, you are not only harming yourself but
also
 the people surrounding you, when you
smoke
 and exhale, toxic
smoke
 called secondhand
smoke
 is emitted, people around you inhale
this
 harmful
smoke
 and make them sick.
Secondly
, smoking affects you socially, cigarette
smoke
 gets stuck in your clothes and on your breath, which makes you smell bad, It is
also
 affecting your appearance, over time, smoking causes the teeth to turn yellow or even brown.
Thirdly
, many teenagers start smoking due to their surroundings, thinking that they have become more mature.
Lastly
, people who
smoke
 spend a lot of money on cigarettes and tobacco which badly wastes their income.
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