in recent years, the family structure has changed, as well as family roles. What are the changes occuring? Do you think these changes are positive or negative ?
These days family roles changed a lot. So, that building of family individuals week. I believe the negative yield is higher.
This
debatable issue and this
essay will discuss the main point and will draw my personal conclusion.
Firstly
, as ,humans we could not live without limits and live guide that is
exactly part of the family structure to keep them safe. For example
, a large number of murders came from people who are do
not have a family to raise them strongly in the personality means they need someone to care about them until that Change the verb form
do
constitute
Correct subject-verb agreement
constitutes
to take
the wrong road. Change the verb form
taking
This
proves clearly why family should be together in the good and the bad moments. Moreover
, some nations leave that person because they feeling
Wrong verb form
feel
the
shame about it which could break their hearts.
Correct article usage
apply
On the other hand
, every one of the home
has a mission to do even they do not know it only the time would learn them Change to a plural noun
homes
that is
time for doing an act. to illustrate, moms take care of that emotion inside the kids to make them calmer and the sadness no one could take it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
of
beside her, while dads carry on their real actions outside the home like in the school how do they working. Change preposition
off
In addition
, the brothers have the
huge section as well as the parents they should posh and handle themselves and Correct article usage
a
talking
if someone hurt a sister or bullying to stop that. Wrong verb form
talk
Hence
the belief that does not think anyone of
the family could live without her or Change preposition
in
him
help.
In conclusion, after a careful analysis of the case, I believe that no one would want to die alone we need someone Change the pronoun
his
understand
Add the particle
to understand
Add an article
the use
Correct your spelling
us
use
and Correct your spelling
us
motivate
us and happy as much as we are Change the verb form
motivates
hapy
with our dream achievements.Correct your spelling
happy
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