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An increasing number of people are buying what they need online what are the advantages and disadvantages for both individuals and companies to shopping online ?

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Most people who live in modern countries are buying the necessary products that they need in online shops. there are both advantages and disadvantages to
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 situation. When people buy something online, they gain saving time and do crosscheck to buy the cheapest between the sites but according to some ,people most of the sites are insecure.
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, the impact of technology is facilitated to explicit benefits of human lives. With an increasing city population, the population don’t want to go to shopping centres due to pandemics. Both the time they spend on the road and the gas money are left to them. if individuals don’t like their furniture, they can give back the products in the online shop. and the
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 benefit of online shopping for the community is transportation to their cargo.Companies don’t have to rent a shop because of online. they can do everything from only one store.
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, they can come across fake sites.
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 they pay the money, a number of firms can send another thing and the product may not be the same as in the picture. if the product is clothes, it may choose the wrong size because they don't see during buying and cargo usually comes late so they lose lots of time. Considering the pros and cons, the pros are them outweighing. Therewithal social media users are young consumers who are influenced by current trends and while it comes to young users who are normal, old society doesn't leave their habits. so most of the users who use the benefits of online shopping are young individuals.
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