Some old customs and traditions are not useful presently, so should be given up. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give specific reason and explain them with examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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No doubt, the world is changing at a rapid pace, and it is often witnessed that many traditional values and customs have no practicability in the present

time

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hence

, there is no need to continue

such

practices. I completely

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this

viewpoint.

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essay shall delve into details and present my opinion.

To begin

, it is reasonable to expect people to discontinue

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old traditions as it is nothing more than a waste of energy and

time

. The fact is that, with the advent of technology, the use of machines has grown exponentially. Many jobs that used to be done manually in earlier times are being done with machines.

For instance

, it was a common tradition in my country for girls to learn the skill of stitching and knitting to be able to stitch traditional clothes for family members.

However

, today, the majority prefer wearing ready-to-wear and fashionable

western

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clothes

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the conventional

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due to

globalization. Understandably, there is nothing wrong

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discontinuing

this

old tradition.

In addition

, with

time

, the role of genders and family members has changed. Earlier, women were supposed to do domestic chores and were not given the opportunity to attain education.

However

, today, it is a daunting task to manage family expenses with one income;

therefore

, the woman has to go out for work, and in turn, the man has to assist her in managing the household. Admittedly, the old customs do not hold ground anymore.

To conclude

, I would like to restate that every tradition has

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own value, but, it fades with

time

and often

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obsolete with

time

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, there is nothing wrong

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discontinuing the ones that do not withstand the changing

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coherence and cohesion

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Some people believe that it is good for a country's culture to import foreign movies and TV programmes. Others think that it is better to produce these locally. Discuss both views and give your opion.

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