Some companies sponsor sports as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good, while others think there are disadvantages to this. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, some
sports
corporations in order to raise public interest by funding
sports
events, competitions and so on. It is commonly believed by certain individuals that benefit
sports
itself, while others bring opposite sites.
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I will discuss both views and give examples respectively as below. On the one hand, it is no doubt that a win-win strategy both for
companies
and
sports
, for it can build positive
apparence
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appearance
and gain huge interest from
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the public
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for relevant
companies
,
sports
can
also
increase the visibility during the
mean time
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meantime
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especially for some small types of
sports
not as known as basketball.
For example
, speed skating was a small group of sport which was not popular and welcomed before, but arising young peer's sight after corporate with particular
sports
companies
, the latter can invite celebrities to promote the products and
sports
with enough budget.
On the other hand
,
sports
may cause harmful
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consequence
consequences
with too
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commercial advertisements, because some people think the virtual nature of
sports
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been
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effected
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affected
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. Take volleyball
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instance, people will make a connection between volleyball and female athletes, because
sports
companies
always invited female
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athletes
and female artists to shoot
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film and
advertise
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advertising
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video
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videos
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which let
audience
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the audience
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take volleyball
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to female athletes for granted.
Such
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deeply
effected
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the nature of
sports
and can not encourage more male peers
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part in
such
area
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. As
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aforehead
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forehead
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, we have to admit that
sports
companies
can directly bring
commerical
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commercial
profits and interest
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sports
.
However
, we
also
have to recognise that we need to pay more attention and effort to arrange the correct schedule and arrangement for each
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of
sports
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sport
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sports sponsorship
  • financial support
  • athletes
  • brand visibility
  • awareness
  • commercialization
  • integrity
  • dependencies
  • corporate funds
  • unethical practices
  • strategic partnerships
  • communal relations
  • promote healthy lifestyles
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