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Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that governments and individuals can tackle these problems.

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It has been universally acknowledged that the problem of overcrowding in metropolitan cities is escalating at an alarming rate in the current scenario.
This
 has been creating a number of issues
such
 as pollution and limited resources. The following paragraphs would elucidate possible reasons for the issue and propose a handful of remedial measures. Commencing with the causes which are responsible for its growth.
Firstly
, due to the large number of people living in the cities, usage of transportation has increased
then
 more fuel burning has happened.
Hence
, the air becomes polluted and society will suffer from diseases
such
 as respiratory conditions. Generally, many states have undergone
this
,
for instance
, in Delhi, the percentage of air pollution increased day by day due to overcrowding and large usage of vehicles. The
second
 contributing factor is resources becoming limited, mainly water and electricity.
Furthermore
,
this
 is a common problem in some places around the world. In order to solve these serious issues, some measures can be taken.
Firstly
, the government should build cities according to the rising population and take proper measures how to reduce pollution as well.
Furthermore
, people must use public transport or carpools
instead
 of using their own vehicles in order to reduce smog in the environment.
In addition
 to
this
, authorities could encourage people to limit the utilising or misuse of resources and create awareness on how to overcome these situations. To recapitulate, I would like to state that both the government and individuals should put their best foot forward together in order to curb the menace.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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