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Explain some of the ways in which human are damaging the environment. What can governments do to address these problems? What can individual do?

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Nowadays, people are destroying
environment
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the environment
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 through different means.
Air
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 and
water
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pollution
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 are some of those harms which are caused by human activities.
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 issue
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 as legislating
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 and individuals’ actions.
Air
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 and
water
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pollution
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 appear to be two of the most significant reasons
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environment
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 destruction. There are many causes
for
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of
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air
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pollution
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 but the major reason is using of fossil
fuels
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through
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in
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 cars, trucks and factories.
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, liquids and solid particles are suspended in the
air
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 and
air
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pollution
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 happens.
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,
water
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pollution
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 is caused when
water
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 is
being
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contaminated due to many factors
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 as
oil
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 leakage during
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 production in seas.
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, there are some actions which can be taken by governments and individuals to solve these problems. Two possible solutions are moving from fossil
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 to clean energies and limiting
oil
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 stains. In order to reduce
air
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pollution
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, governments can legislate
laws
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 to restrict fossil
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fuels
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fuel
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 consumption.
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, according to the United States’
laws
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, factories are being enforced to use power or solar energies
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 of fossil
fuels
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.
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, individuals can decrease burning fossil
fuels
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 by using electronic vehicles or
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bikes
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instead
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 of driving.
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, the government performs
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 role in
restriction
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the restriction
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 of
water
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oil
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pollution
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 by enforcing
laws
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.
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, according to
“Clean
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the “Clean
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Water
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 Act” British Petroleum company, is known
BP
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as BP
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 was enforced to pay
huge
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a huge
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 compensation for
Gulf
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the Gulf
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 of Mexico
oil
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 spill in 2010. In the same way, using
of
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advanced technology and equipment by
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 companies can control
oil
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 leakage. To conclude, because of some human activities,
air
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 and
water
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pollution
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 happens which are damage our environment. The governments and individuals can take some measures to tackle
this
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 issue.
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