Scientists and technology experts seem to be more valued by modern society then musicians and artists. To what extent do you agree?

Doctors, researchers, and computer specialists are thought to be more respected than entertainers
such
as singers and actors.
Although
artificial intelligence developers like Elon Musk and Bill Gates are famous for their
works
, global
celebrities
have
stronger
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many international issues
such
as climate change and racial
discriminations
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because they connect with their
fans
emphatetically
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emphatically
empathetically
.
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that, people tend to
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artists more these days because creative
works
connect at personal levels with them. Actors, singers, comedians, and TV personalities often interact with general audiences through live shows on social media. Because most creatives freely express themselves and connect with their
fans
as regular citizens, slowly, trust between them is established.
That is
why, when
celebrities
discuss serious topics
such
as climate change and racial discrimination, their supporters become aware and support the cause.
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, more global citizens become aware
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global warming because of Leonardo DiCaprio's speech at the United Nations. Without Di Caprio's speech, the world wouldn't have been aware
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the global warming issues already spoken by eminent scientists for years.
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awareness about important issues, the
works
of these
celebrities
impact their
fans
personally. Many songs from BTS and Katty Perry,
for example
, help many teenagers go through depressing episodes in their
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lives
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. Their
works
have entertained many who cannot express their problems freely and because of
this
many have turned to loyal
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celebrities
' loyal supporters. With more buying the singers' albums, generally, it can be seen that modern individuals respect and value their idols more than
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scientists. In conclusion, many around the globe value
celebrities
these days because of their ability to connect with their
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personal
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level.
Moreover
, not only had their songs and movies entertained the audiences but
also
helped them feel understood.
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  • valued
  • modern society
  • scientists
  • technology experts
  • musicians
  • artists
  • reliance
  • scientific advancements
  • practical benefits
  • driving economic growth
  • daily lives
  • culture
  • human emotions
  • express ideas
  • provoke thought
  • spiritual well-being
  • emotional well-being
  • preserving cultural heritage
  • subjective nature
  • diversity
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