the key to solving the environmental problems is for the present generation to sacrifice their convenient lifestyle for the sake of future generation. Do you agree or disagree with statement?

For the past few decades, the environmental problem
is
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a serious issue in the world. There is an ongoing debate among people about whether the current
generation
should alter their present lifestyle for the coming
generation
or not. I, partially agree with the statement and will state the valid reasons for the same. To
embark
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with, it is inevitable to say that with each passing
day
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we are losing our environment to a great extent, but sacrificing our comforts for the upcoming
generation
is not the right decision to make.
Instead
of leaving things for them, it will be better if we educate them about environmental degradation.
For example
, it is our duty to aware our children
of
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the over-utilisation of resources and how to save our Earth from global warming
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This
can only be achieved if we first inculcate these habits in the present
generation
such
as switching off their engines at red signals and indulging in Van-Mahotsav activities.
On the other hand
, by sacrificing luxury, we can make
this
planet a better place to live for our loved ones. Even though appliances are really significant in everyone's lives, it would be great if we try to use only those which are necessary.
For instance
, there is no need
of having
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plenty of air conditioners in one place, if people can even survive with one.
Furthermore
, emissions from cars
also
affect the environment badly, if people use more public transport over private vehicles, there will
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ray of hope for our next
generation
.
To sum up
,
the
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environmental issues are those issues which we cannot neglect but handling them with maturity can help us overcome
this
global problem. If the government implements certain strict measures against
this
, we would be able to save The Earth from falling down.
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