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It is now possible for scientists and tourists to travel to remote natural environments, such as the South pole. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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In recent decades, adventures over long distances are available for inventors and visitors.
Although
 travel to remote space has many benefits, the drawbacks involved are
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important to be discussed.
To begin
 with, it may appear that it proves beneficial. The
first
 important reason is concerned with finding out new resources and knowledge for consumption and use in research are being aimed to reach brilliant achievements. It means, that accessing new natural environments help researcher progress in their field and resolve many problems.
For instance
, today with developments in technology many scientists from all over the world
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 to new fields and development in various fields, especially sciences and
also
 there are a number of far destinations
such
 as the North and South poles that attract many people from all over the world every year. Having said that,
however
, the downside of travelling to distant regions should not be underestimated. Attending visitors to
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nature has a negative impact on various aspects of the environment. One of the main negative points can be causing pollution in the environment. An obvious example of
this
 situation is that every year, many lands and sea creatures were harmed by human rubbish and waste that
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 left in the environment and damaged their habitats. Another evident demerits side is the high costs of travelling in remote range and
also
 it has many difficulties
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 the far ways and endangers people’s life as well. On balance, going to distant natural areas would be both rewarding and problematic. While it may lead to significant discoveries and dramatic progress. Researchers and travellers are highly likely to suffer from financial and travel difficulties as well as provide environmental pollution.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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