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. Your local council is closing the children’s playground in your locality as not many children visit the park. Write a letter to the council requesting not to close it

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Dear Sir or Madam I am writing
this
 letter to you to reassess the decision which you made to shut down the Kids Play Ground due to the lack of
children
Firstly
, I Would like to aware in our locality there are few
children
's playgrounds ,especially in our park equipped with Sports and many Health activities for
children
 in spite of the Lack of maintenance some types of equipment are not working properly
consequently
 parents feel the fear of their
children
 engage the time in the Park I wish to suggest the particular opinions indeed recalibrate the machinery and keep the material well maintain mode definitely plants and landscape must maintain proper manner
Add the comma(s)
, as a result,
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as a result
 we can expect more
children
. Part of the awareness run the social media campaign through the internet for the importance of Childen's playground and showcase the equipment and Landscapes Looking forward to hearing a positive reply and prompt action Yours Sincerely, John
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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