You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. With the improvements in today’s health care, society has to care for more and more elderly people. Do you feel that society will be able to cope with the increase in numbers of elderly people today and how can it be managed? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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Nowadays,

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the health

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health

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healthcare

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care

system keeps accelerating.

Therefore

, our society needs to take more

care

of our

aging

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ageing

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population. The question of whether our society can handle the rising figures of elderly

people

are

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still concerning. For me,

although

our governments have tried to solve

this

problem, they still need more plans to manage

this

issue.

First

of all, since technology advanced at the same time, we can use technology devices to help us surveillance the

health

situation of elderly

people

. Specifically, doctors or family members can use electronic devices

such

smart

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smartwatch

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watch

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watches

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to help monitor the heart rate, the oxygen rate in

blood

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the blood

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, and the breath rate of old

people

For example

, it is dangerous for

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apply

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elderly

people

suffering a serious fall, but with

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a smart

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smart watch

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smartwatch

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, it can help call the ambulance or inform other family members to help.

Moreover

, since more and more

poeple

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people

devorced

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divorced

after their kids are mature enough to leave the home,

single

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the single

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elderly population has skyrocketed in the past decades.

This

means that governments should take more

care

of elderly

poeple's

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people's

mental

health

. Fortunately,

this

problem can be solved by providing some parties

between

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for

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single elderly population or by building

organisaions

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organisations

which can help

caring

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to care

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these

people

everyday

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every day

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Last

but not least, because most of the jobs in

elderly

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the elderly

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care

system are not well-paid, many publics

reluctant

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are reluctant

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to become a member to help old

people

In particular

this

makes the

labor

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labour

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supply in

this

field always scarce. The solution is that governments can set the wage floor for

this

industry. As the result, workers would be more willing to work in

this

field and maintain their life quality at the same time. To sum up, since

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the health

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health

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healthcare

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care

system has been improved, taking

care

of elderly

people

becomes an important issue.

Nevertheless

this

can be

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overcome

overcomed

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overcome

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by cautious plans and actions from our authorities.

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Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

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Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
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3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

311 words

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