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The cost of flying has decreased significantly over the last decade.this has made overseas travel much more accessible.Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this trend.

In some previous eras,
people
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 are travelling too much in foreign countries because the rate of travelling
cost
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 is declining
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.
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 happens due to numerous reasons and has various merits and demerits which will be discussed in the below paragraphs.
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 with,the major benefit of
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 development is ,
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 and foremost, the
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 of flight are less expensive so that ,all kinds of categories can effort their rates.All classes of
people
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 can fly to other countries compared to the previous period.Now
people
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 flying in overseas for many reasons it including for study ,
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 and as a tourist.but it is possible because it is not costly.
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, another maritdof
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 Trend. It is more profitable for businessmen to improve their
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 in foreign countries now they make a transaction very easily and they do not get any burden of
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 and losses in the
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.They improve their
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 with new foreign techniques and knowledge
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, there are several drawbacks to the situation .When it is easy to travel to another
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 it prevents bad impacts on airline budget. They cannot cover the burden of
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 reason for
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 happening is the low
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 of travelling. The incomes are significantly decreased and
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 are gradually increased they do not make a balance in income and
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.
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, it prevents very bad impact on
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culture
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people
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 move to another
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 and they stay in a foreign
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 so, they forget their own
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 value and
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 follow foreign
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 result of
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 their native
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 value disappears. In conclusion,
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 by
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 travelling in another
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 is gradually increase because of airlines
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 has reduced.It is beneficial to all classes and businessmen ,
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, it has a loss to our
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 and airline economy.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Global connectivity
  • Cross-cultural understanding
  • Tourism boost
  • Carbon emissions
  • Environmental degradation
  • Overtourism
  • Local resources
  • Infrastructure strain
  • Travel accessibility
  • Economic backgrounds
  • Commercialization
  • Dilution of local cultures
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